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Freedom's avatar

Such a sad and helpless feeling to be in love, and be loved by someone, when circumstances don’t allow for that love to flourish. Like Romeo and Juliette...the heartache and longing.

I hope this was a work of purely fiction. Seemed like a lot of life experience in that story.

CinnamonGirl's avatar

I live in Michigan. My first thought as I was reading her dialogue was, “I definitely don’t speak like that”. Then I read some of her words out loud, once then twice just to verify that, yes I absolutely do pronounce words like that lol. Oops. Great writing! I was kinda pissed that he didn’t have a backbone. He already had 2 degrees, a high paying job, and lived 2 thousand miles from his father. Plus, she would have fit in beautifully in liberal California. What did he really have to lose? Not speaking to his father ever again? But, I guess that would be a different story and one that I would love to read! Thanks for posting!

Brad's avatar

Haha, I'm from Michigan too. I tried to make the pronunciations accurate but it's hard.

Eucatastrophe2021's avatar

I love your stories. Thank you.

Athena's avatar

Incredible writing. Such depth. I’d like to pre-order a copy of your first book. If you’ve already written one, what is the title and where can I get it?

Denise Chukker's avatar

Oh My God…….such despair…..substance over form or form over substance….Jace will forever second guess himself…….I’m spent.

truthseeker's avatar

Great writing, great storytelling! It was so good that I scoured Substack today to find it again because I had started reading it on Saturday but didn't have time to finish it and had forgotten to save it.

Denise O’Rourke's avatar

Such deep writing. You are an incredible author with a magical gift with words.

Brad's avatar

Thank you!

biff33's avatar

Virtuosic.

Hollis Brown's avatar

good stuff Brad. keep it up brotha..!

Athena's avatar

Brad, disregard my previous question about your book. Just found it in your bio. I’m not sure how I stumbled upon your substack, but I’m glad I did.

Brad's avatar

Thank you, you made my day.

Charles Clemens's avatar

Great writing, Brad. Thank you.

Mac's avatar

Life....it ain't easy.

Ericsgr3n's avatar

Superb, appreciated it so much, kudos and thank you!

Bill Heath's avatar

This is a repeat of the post that first brought you to my attention as a fellow eclectic. Once again, well-done.

Ro Dann's avatar

If he loved her, wouldn’t he have been worried when she stopped responding

Brad's avatar

I suppose he just thought she was mad at him.

Ro Dann's avatar

Yes, that was clear.

This reminds me of a Story in Candace Bushnell’s Sex in the City, about a man who pushed away a woman he was in love with because she was a little overweight. That was the best story in the book btw