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Freedom's avatar

Such a sad and helpless feeling to be in love, and be loved by someone, when circumstances don’t allow for that love to flourish. Like Romeo and Juliette...the heartache and longing.

I hope this was a work of purely fiction. Seemed like a lot of life experience in that story.

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CinnamonGirl's avatar

I live in Michigan. My first thought as I was reading her dialogue was, “I definitely don’t speak like that”. Then I read some of her words out loud, once then twice just to verify that, yes I absolutely do pronounce words like that lol. Oops. Great writing! I was kinda pissed that he didn’t have a backbone. He already had 2 degrees, a high paying job, and lived 2 thousand miles from his father. Plus, she would have fit in beautifully in liberal California. What did he really have to lose? Not speaking to his father ever again? But, I guess that would be a different story and one that I would love to read! Thanks for posting!

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Brad's avatar

Haha, I'm from Michigan too. I tried to make the pronunciations accurate but it's hard.

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Eucatastrophe2021's avatar

I love your stories. Thank you.

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Athena's avatar

Incredible writing. Such depth. I’d like to pre-order a copy of your first book. If you’ve already written one, what is the title and where can I get it?

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Denise Chukker's avatar

Oh My God…….such despair…..substance over form or form over substance….Jace will forever second guess himself…….I’m spent.

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truthseeker's avatar

Great writing, great storytelling! It was so good that I scoured Substack today to find it again because I had started reading it on Saturday but didn't have time to finish it and had forgotten to save it.

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Brad's avatar

Thank you!

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Denise O’Rourke's avatar

Such deep writing. You are an incredible author with a magical gift with words.

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Brad's avatar

Thank you!

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biff33's avatar

Virtuosic.

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Hollis Brown's avatar

good stuff Brad. keep it up brotha..!

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Athena's avatar

Brad, disregard my previous question about your book. Just found it in your bio. I’m not sure how I stumbled upon your substack, but I’m glad I did.

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Brad's avatar

Thank you, you made my day.

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Charles Clemens's avatar

Great writing, Brad. Thank you.

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Mac's avatar

Life....it ain't easy.

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Ericsgr3n's avatar

Superb, appreciated it so much, kudos and thank you!

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Bill Heath's avatar

This is a repeat of the post that first brought you to my attention as a fellow eclectic. Once again, well-done.

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Ro Dann's avatar

If he loved her, wouldn’t he have been worried when she stopped responding

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Brad's avatar

I suppose he just thought she was mad at him.

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Ro Dann's avatar

Yes, that was clear.

This reminds me of a Story in Candace Bushnell’s Sex in the City, about a man who pushed away a woman he was in love with because she was a little overweight. That was the best story in the book btw

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